What do you think of this plot?

It's about a boy called Karzo Kalixo (It's set in lord of the rings age) and he crosses the border into the magic lands. Legend has it that if you cross the border you'll be cursed, but no one knows what the curse is. He crosses out of curiosity. Now, someone sees him and runs into the city, telling everyone. So when Karzo gets there no one will talk to him. They all give him dirty looks. He gets to his house and his family have locked the door, and they're looking at him, frightened out of the window. After a few days, Karzo thinks that that is his curse, so he goes and jumps of a cliff, thus killing himself. Then he wakes up and it's all a dream. He's in his room. Everything is like it was the morning before he crossed the border. His sword and shield are there, but when he goes down, his family are different. He goes into the city and everyone else is different. So, he commits suicide again. He realises e does not feel pain when he dies. He wakes up and a similar thing happens: a different family, different people. The cycle repeats itself.. The fifth time he's committed suicide he realises his freedom, and does what ever he wants. Kills himself in fun ways, creative ways, and murders, robs, and everything. One time he manages to kill the queen. But soon, he gets a bit depressed, and longs for his old life. He commits suicide, and wakes up, but he has a bad family. He keeps trying to have the right family. Never finding a good one, he runs away, he thinks that is what he must do. That doesn't give much use either, so he thinks he'll have to kill himself again. He climbs to the highest tower in the city, to jump. But up there, he meets another boy, about the same age. He thinks what the hell, and they both share stories about why they were jumping. The boy (Faltox) had a similar story to Karzo. They'd both crossed the border! So they decided to stay alive, and together find a way of getting back to normal. But when they do stay alive, every thing seems to go wrong. Every things trying to kill them. The city is incaded, dragons and other monsters come. They're meant to die. So, fighting for survival, they find a way to get back to their old lives and Karzo's life rewinds to when he was about to cross the border. Instead of crossing, he just goes home. The end.



Should it be set in fantasy time, or modern times? What should the task be that stops the curse? Is this a good plot? Why? This will be written in first person (even though I hate first person), but to see my writing style, have a look at this. http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/book.a鈥?/a>What do you think of this plot?
It's great, I love it. But you've glossed over one very important detail.



"...they find a way to get back to their old lives..."



The success of your story hangs on that moment there. You have to make it as clever as the scenario you've set up, or it may be a let down. I'm afraid I don't have any ideas, but then, I don't know your story world as well as you do, and I don't fully understand how this 'magic border' works. I'm sure you can come up with something, but make sure you do or your story will suffer.



Think about your main character's traits and flaws, and how he learns and changes in the course of the story. His final actions at the climax should be things he was never capable of before; new things, skills or personal strengths he has learned from his journey. Maybe that can help inspire you.



Good luck!
Sounds appealing.

You should get down the first chapter quick!

The only thing i barely dislike about it was the character names.What do you think of this plot?
Great, now write the book.
good. so long to read.What do you think of this plot?
Sounds good to me. I think it would be better suited to an old-fashioned, Medieval time than a modern time, because it seems like more of a time when there would be dragons, monsters, invaded towns etc. As for the person it'd be written in, first person would make it more personal and may make the reader more able to understand how he feels about being stuck in a Groundhog Day-type scenario, but I prefer to read things in the third person because it gives the reader a better idea/perception of the whole story. As long as it's well-written though, it could work in either person
Sounds very interesting. but go carefully with it as the plot MAY be seen as to close to R.L.Stein's Don"t go to Sleep, or Groundhog's Day. I do like your story idea, and would read it if I found it on a shelf. Immortality is the curse? do the waken in their "home" everytime or if they leave the village do they waken where they are?

You have given enough to wet the appitite
I think it would be better suited to be a modern story. It sounds like a very interesting plot because a lot can happen in it. I think you should take a look at the movie The Deaths of Ian Stone to give you inspiration, but to also show you what has been done. What if the way to stop the curse is to walk over the border backwards.